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Bruce Toews ([personal profile] dogriver) wrote2008-09-23 03:28 pm
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Saying Goodbye: LJ Idol, Week 1

Saying Goodbye



I had to say goodbye this morning,
What else could I do?
I really wasn't left with any choice,
I had to leave abruptly,
Though I really hope you heard,
The pain and anguished torture in my voice.

It's true, the time when we're together
Fills me with such joy,
But I truly hope that you can understand,
I had to do the things I did,
Despite this empty voide,
This is a time when life just isn't grand.

I had to say goodbye to you,
Just know that I'll be back,
The pain and hurt's so real, but it shall end,
You'll fold me up in your embrace,
My joy will be complete:
Tonight, dear bed, I'll sleep in you again.

[identity profile] bewize.livejournal.com 2008-09-23 09:27 pm (UTC)(link)
Too funny!

I loved it. :)

[identity profile] lyssas-song.livejournal.com 2008-09-24 01:02 am (UTC)(link)
Just know that if you were presenting this and I was there, I would be cheering and applauding for you right now! LOL! I love this, and you can probably guess why. Ah, the pleasures of the bed.

[identity profile] boxsofrain.livejournal.com 2008-09-24 03:36 am (UTC)(link)
This was a really cute take on the topic. :)

[identity profile] spydielives.livejournal.com 2008-09-24 08:40 am (UTC)(link)
*giggle* I think I know someone else who would appreciate this.

[identity profile] darkprism.livejournal.com 2008-09-25 07:26 pm (UTC)(link)
THANK YOU.
For writing something humorous.

I pat my bed goodbye every morning. It feels the love. :)

~*~

[identity profile] masterofmusings.livejournal.com 2008-09-25 08:34 pm (UTC)(link)
My pleasure. After about half a dozen false starts, this little piece kind of wrote itself. And it was most certainly from the heart.

[identity profile] dabhug.livejournal.com 2008-09-25 08:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Nice twist and thank you for the laugh!

[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/____hejira/ 2008-09-26 03:29 am (UTC)(link)
Haha. Glorious. A nice light entry. Refreshing.

[identity profile] elderwoodpixie.livejournal.com 2008-09-26 02:31 pm (UTC)(link)
That was good, clean, fun. Loved it!

[identity profile] lilmissmagic71.livejournal.com 2008-09-27 04:28 am (UTC)(link)
*snort* Loved this!

[identity profile] rdfreak.livejournal.com 2008-09-27 05:12 am (UTC)(link)
Lol very clever! :)
good luck in idol! :)

[identity profile] jenandbronze.livejournal.com 2008-09-27 09:24 pm (UTC)(link)
This was so cute! I am not the poetic type, although I've seen you with other friends on my FList, and hope you don't mind if I friend you. I've voted you! Good luck to you in LJI. (This is my first year as well....)

[identity profile] rosepurr.livejournal.com 2008-09-28 02:03 am (UTC)(link)
Ha!!

[identity profile] libra-dragon.livejournal.com 2008-09-28 04:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Cute!
Great entry

[identity profile] baxaphobia.livejournal.com 2008-09-28 05:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh little brother! You made me laugh quite hard! Great job!
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[personal profile] shadowwolf13 2008-09-28 07:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Very cute, loved the twist. :)

Best of luck in Idol.

[identity profile] imafarmgirl.livejournal.com 2008-09-28 09:16 pm (UTC)(link)
brilliant. This was fun!

[identity profile] ahavah-ehyeh.livejournal.com 2008-09-28 10:39 pm (UTC)(link)
Very nice! The first poem I ever wrote was from the point of view of my bed. Takes me back. :)

[identity profile] alycewilson.livejournal.com 2008-09-29 12:14 am (UTC)(link)
Love the surprise ending!